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I can't believe this shitty story is 13 years old.

For some reason all of ElizabethAshbury's stories make me think of the song 'Dreams' by Fleetwood Mac............ I really don't know why, they just do. Like Seriously, play that song on itunes or spottily while you read this story, it works...

Finger sandwich hahaha

Hey, you're the gal who wrote Jonathan Luvs Jessica! Glad to see your work has improved . . . somewhat.

The reason I clicked on your story in the first place is because of the description blaring "A LOT OF BONDAGE, S&M AND IS PRETTY HARDCORE!" because I'm a pervert like that.

Honestly, you need a lot more work.

Bondage is not simply tying someone's hand behind their back. If that were true, then all cops would be practitioners of light bondage.

Second, hardcore S&M is not simply beating someone on the ass. Do some research, because it's called 'spanking' not 'flogging'. Just because a song only talks about one thing, don't be afraid to expand on it. If you want a serious, hardcore S&M story, you'll need a lot more that spanking.

It was a decent story (finally one that wasn't about Jonathan hooking up with a groupie), but you need to do your homework. Don't guess on a word's meaning, and while you might think your story is hardcore, another person might not.

Oh...and if you're writing a series, don't have the same damn thing in every installment.

omg!!!! misscatwomen you are the best if i could i would give it eight stars. it was sexy, thrilling and original. bravo!!!

*laughs insanely* Holy sheeeeeeeEEEEEit! That was fucking AWESOME. And the Are you ready part was just priceless. ^_^ I have to say, I've never ever thought of putting my fantasies down on paper, but believe me, theyu were dirtier than this. I hope you live up to my expectationa with theond ond third or fouth Make me beg. ^_^ I wanna write about an Orgy with the Slipknot guys. *rubs hands* Eheheheheheh...... Damn... That would be nice..... Or Maybe Jonathan Davis, Fred Durst, Chester Bennington, and David Draiman. Oh shit that would be fucking awesome. Well, you're fantasy story is quite a good inspiration to my dark mind. Thank you! Gotta go listen to Blind........

Th The Forsaken Freak

That was the best story I read on Jonathan omg!

what was the first one i read... oh yeah it was gay but funny

anyway i love Jonathan a hell of a lot but there is shit in there i won't do like that paddle sh
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i mean i will love to have one and paint "Beat it up Right " and have it on my wall but no fucking way will it be used on me...

anyway can't wait to read ur other ones......

what will be the most funniest shit is if this story ever goes out and he reads it

keep up the good work!

That had more S&M than I would have liked, but that was amazing!