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October 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I thought it was pretty good!! I have to agree with Anon about it going by too quickly. So quickly that the relationship that developed between Sean and Naomi almost seem premature. I give it 3 +a
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January 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
'Very anticipated'
Get over yourself
Get over yourself
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December 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
The story was ok. The biggest problem I had was the fact that I was confused greatly, not just within the story but the whole idea of the story being in Vin Diesel's section confused me. Was Sean DiesDiesel? If so, could you say that in the beginning? Or maybe you could give a physical description of Sean. That's another problem I had. The story wasn't descriptive enough and it went by so quick. Maybe if you would've stopped and written more about stuff it would have been better. I gave it three +'s. Well done.
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May 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
read it all. enjoyed your other work as well. I always know that I'd get whole read from you. satisfying.
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March 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I've read your story and so far I like it. And I just saw the commercial for "A Man Apart", hope it's as good as this story. Well, I'm off to read more!