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by danniisahne

person Marie
schedule October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked your fick. I really like the JC/Lance paring and the paint…maybe not quite the color scheme, but I understand how you wanted to work the song into the fick. I do think the writing It’s self could have been better though. It read like you rushed to write it, and the word “shall” seemed out of place. It was a little too 18th century for me. But, over all I liked it. :) A chapter two would be groove.