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by GabrielPierce

person DrkDreamer
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, my...

Very good, very hot.

Wish I had a little more faith in Jay. He went from being kinda nice to being a real jerk.

I wish you'd do another chapter and figure out a happy ending for Amir and Paige.
person DrkDreamer
schedule August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My first review didn't seem to 'take'.

I really like your writing. You build some very intense scenes.

I wish you'd add a chapter and figure out a way to make a happy ending for Paige and Amir...