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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great Fic so far :D Look forward to more chapters
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October 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Really liking the atmosphere and angst, poor Darren in that last chapter. My heart was aching for him.
I think there's maybe a bit of Linda G's beta advise accidentlky left in though. In this paragraph:
"He put his bag on one of the sinks, and searched for his black mascara. It didn't take five minutes. When Darren's make up was perfect again, he put his things in his bag again, always aware that none of the other guys, which could come in, saw something of that. (I'm not sure what you are trying to say here. Always sure that none of the other guys who could come in saw something of that. I'm sorry, what do you mean?)"
Looking forward to next chapter.
Foraoo x
I think there's maybe a bit of Linda G's beta advise accidentlky left in though. In this paragraph:
"He put his bag on one of the sinks, and searched for his black mascara. It didn't take five minutes. When Darren's make up was perfect again, he put his things in his bag again, always aware that none of the other guys, which could come in, saw something of that. (I'm not sure what you are trying to say here. Always sure that none of the other guys who could come in saw something of that. I'm sorry, what do you mean?)"
Looking forward to next chapter.
Foraoo x
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October 4, 2003 at 12:00 AM
wow this is powerful stuff
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October 3, 2003 at 12:00 AM
of, wow, that was good! Please, go on , can't wait to read next chapter :)
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October 2, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter I can't wait to read more, keep it up.
Tana
Tana