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for Breaking Through

by gardenrose

person Ilze
schedule February 27, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hey...

Just my reflections after reading your story...
Exacting and dainty reader (as me, lol) needs something more than neat plot, D&D and sex for a good story. He/she needs subtle language, impressive way of expression.
What I wanted to say? I like your style. You know, I just... sometimes I read and... wow, there's such a briliant sentence. For example,



or

One may say, it's nothing, just sentences. But somehow... they enrich your story. It's a pleasure to read.

Hope you understood, what I tried to say. Jus' wanted to say it :) Hope you write more. Good luck!

person Ilze
schedule February 27, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Sorry, those 2 quotes werHis His eyes are speaking volumes, Daniel thought… >

and

person LindaG
schedule February 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Interesting chapter. Sexy. A bit strange. It's nice to see Darren happy? At least I think he is.
person LindaG
schedule February 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow. This chapter was pretty darn not. There were a couple of places where I think you mixed up their names, but this chapter was still intense.
And Daniel. He seems to be giving Darren what the Diva needs, but from his tears in the shower, I'm not sure he's getting what he needs.
Please write more soon.
person dazzy
schedule February 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Really good story! Please, update soon!
person Pomona
schedule February 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hee..ee... you're good. You're really, *really* good at this. It's all pain mixing with pleasure and that's EXACTLY how it should be. Great job!
person LindaG
schedule February 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I simply loved chapter 3 it was SO sweet. It started out sadly, yes, but you brought them back together and made it sweet and sexy.
Wonderful job.
person LindaG
schedule February 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
The sadness and confusion in chapter 4 is very nearly heart stopping. I feel so bad for the boys.
And Daniel basically raping Darren in the shower. Brought tears to my eyes.
I can't wait until you update again.
Very good story. I love it.
person LindaG
schedule February 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Interesting beginning. I already hate their manager. :P
I am looking ard ard to the next chapter to see where you take this story.