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March 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i have to say that this is quite possibly one of the best stories i have ever read outside of a novel. And thats not just because i'm a shakira fan either. It flowed with a great pace yet took its time with the details to paint vivid pictures in the minds eye without ever losing step. It was creative yet it didn't go so far as to make it unbelievable. I love this story and i think that more of it is in order or at the very least a new one with Shakira and how she is today.
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October 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Shakira is one hot number! This story just ups that sexiness to whole new level and I really love it!!!!!
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October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is so fucking good! It is just fucking amazing! You have an alluring and amazing writing style. You make the reader want to read more and your sex scenes are so descriptive and wow! Please continue to write and you should try to get something published! :)
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, firstly... since I adore Shakira that helped this story out. :) I like your writing style, first person without being cocky or Mary-Sueish. I also liked in chapter three how you included that 'Kira is just a person too; rejection is a fear for her too. The only thing that bugged me were the typos. I don't know if that was from uploading it or whatnot but it was distracting. Otherwise, very sexy story.
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December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
another chapter? pretty pretty please with sugar on top
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September 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Doesen't Shakira talk in only her native Spanish?
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August 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Now THAT'S the best girlfriend EVER. Jane, you really have a grasp on things, don't you?
Letting your girl sleep with Shakira if ever she got the chance...girl, you're a keeper!
Okay, sorry. I know this isn't really feedback, but I couldn't resist.
But REAL feedback is coming, I promise!!
Love your outlook on life and your sense of humor...LOVE IT.
Oral
Letting your girl sleep with Shakira if ever she got the chance...girl, you're a keeper!
Okay, sorry. I know this isn't really feedback, but I couldn't resist.
But REAL feedback is coming, I promise!!
Love your outlook on life and your sense of humor...LOVE IT.
Oral
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May 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I a g a good story, Jane, but really.. it's obviously a fantasy of yours. Doesn't your girlfriend/boyfriend get jealous? I would.... *stops typing to laugh uncontrolably* Sorry gorgeous. *giggles* I love you.
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May 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
No Nina, my girlfriend does not get jealous. Because she knows that I would allow her to have sex with Shakira if she had the chance as well. I think that's fair, don't you? :-D