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for Motel Dune (294 word ficlet)

by Jeffree

person Inge
schedule October 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ah, wasn't that the sweetest?
:-)
Yes, certainly had a good laugh at the end !
Cool !
person orli\'s_girl
schedule February 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
o_O
BARF
person Gabby
schedule February 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was so very very wrong!
person buggycas
schedule February 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hehehehehehehehehehehehe I have no idea what possessed you to write this... but it's funny
person Anon
schedule January 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. You can write, but I think with some practice (and a good beta reader) you could be even better. Your story seem to lack in the development of characters and plot. Even ficlets should have strong character representation which is something you fall short in. Still, there weren't any major errors that I can see. Like I said, with more practice, your writing will mature. I look forward to seeing you inprove.

Cheers.
person queen_of_mirkwood
schedule January 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ewww ewww ewww ewww ewww ewww ewww ewww ewww ewww ewww
person Jeffree
schedule January 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Heh! Thanks doll, always the reaction I'm looking for ;p

- Jeff
person Ylith
schedule January 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oohhh...you sick fucker. I loved that fic the first time I read it and I still love it now. cheers luv