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You need to slow the fuck down, and put atleast some more details. and this is coming from a fucktard that rushes his stories too

Hey, glad you're still at this! The last two chapters fit in nicely with the rest of the story. One question though: How can the girls in the basement talk and tell each other their histories when they are gagged with a feeding tube running into their mouth...? Just a thought...

Good, though it should be clear that lohan rarely deserves any sympathy these days, keep the story as it is, extreme fantasy gang bang.

BTW this is millie's lover here, you still able to include Danielle Nicholls? You can try adding maria Shaprova as well (surprisingly nobody has put her on this site!)

Amazing, I'm actually finding twisted amusment out of this but don't call lindsey 'Milk Jugs' please. Calling people by name dosen't mean giving them respect, it's how you say it that can turn it to a respect or an insult.

Your writing has gotten a lot better and i was wondering, you think you can have Danielle Nicholls being banged, make sure it's by a cocky guy in his 20's, tad overweight, blonde hair and blue eyes. Reasonabley tall.

Danielle Nicholls is a TV presenter, google, her name and she appered in a kids TV show, she's surprisingly quite hot (she got fired because of revealing too much apprently) and was pictured in a tabloid half nude. So she is a C celeb.

If you type in (or copy and paste her name from this review) onto the youtubewebsite, you'll see a pic of her pole dancing, she did that as a some 'work experince' perhaps that can serve as some material for you.

Anyway, update next chapter!

Yeah, it really seems you're not one of Lindsey's biggest fans... I don't mind, I don't care much about her. But she has great tits, no doubt about it, and you have a twisted mind - which is cool with me. I liked the auction-part/idea, though I have a hard time someone's making a mulit-million Dollar profit if he/she/they keep auctioning of A-list celebreties for 40 grand. But that's just me. Anyway, look forward to reading the last two chapters! Thanks for sticking with this story even though you've got some pretty harsh reviews in the beginning!

Good story so far, are u planning to put Paris Hilton
in it?

I f u take requests, Michelle Trachtenberg, and Alexis Bledel

Thanks

Wang

Obviously, it's not polished writing.
However, that doesn't matter a whit.
The material speaks for itself - please, more!

Here's some advice.

1.) Move out of your mother's basement.
2.) Don't quit your day job.
3.) Find something better to do with your time.

I like this story - it's more cruel and twisted than most of the other stories I've read so far. Please keep writing!

After reading the reviews before I actually read Chapter 1 I have to say I wasn't sure what to expect. Now, after I've read the first Chapter, I can't agree with all the harsh feedback you've received. I don't see why your writing would suck and I can't think of a reason to trash Chapter 1. Sure, it's a twisted idea, but this is FanFiction after all - THE place for twisted ideas. Other than some people most likely finding the idea of rape and abduction sickening, there's no reason not to like this story. I did, and I'll most likely read the next Chapters, too.