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for When Will it All Stop?

by yukithevampireprince

person fulya
schedule December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well...its very confusing and kinda is too fast so i dont really understand what is going on, but it looks nice ^^; perhaps you should put more detail into actions cause i didn't really understand

and..hahah XD miyu gets vet appointments and shinya doesn't know it XD XD XD
*dreams of the cute litle white dog phoning the vet and letting shinya know later XD*
oh dear XD

cute though XD if you dont count few typing mistakes..Update soon ^_^
person Kyo
schedule July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It might've grabbed my attention if your grammar was better. :/
person yami990
schedule July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this sounds like it will get better so please continue.
person Kaichan
schedule July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
uh.. it's not that bad i suppose. you need to work on grammar, and at least proof-read what you type/write to fix all your typos, they make alot of it hard to understand/read. i hope it gets better...