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for The Babysitter

by redqueeninwonderland

person rylie
schedule August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love love love this one!
person Citrone
schedule August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was hot lol, keep going with it
person Chigaimasu
schedule August 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's great so far, and it reads well. There are a couple of misspellings that irk me, but that's just me. You're very descriptive, and that's great. I can't wait to see what happens.
person ThisIsGreenDay
schedule August 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE with some "UNH UNH" hahahaha. Makes me want to write another story on here...
person asdsadffsd
schedule August 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yeah i liked it.... but where is it leading? hmmmmm. cliche. haha. i think it would be cool if it was in billie's point of view for a time being causei wanna know what he thinks and why he came home soo early ... was it really cause plans were CANCLED? hmmm i wonder. you should really try that out. other wise good story . you posted very soon wonder if you will again? hmmm i wonder.
person heartgrenade13
schedule August 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love this story because Ava is a lot like me...it's stays consistent too. none of the chapters are weak. Good job!!!
person alsdkfj
schedule August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i liked it,, but is Adrienne still with Billie? you mentioned she bought the food but he didn't mention anything like where his wife was. and isn't Joesph older than jakob? just friendly critisism. i liked it even though ava is a total bitch and very cocky. but all around it was good! post soon.
person Kevyn
schedule August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!
...and by "soon", i mean like, now...
person Citrone
schedule August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like this keep going with it