rate_review Reviews

great start. Would love to see you continue this. It's a hot pairing, and Meeves is just so sexy. He can be really cute too. If you haven't seen Miyavi spaz, I would definitely recommend checking out youtube.com and searching for cute Miyavi clips. He's a god on guitar, but a spaz otherwise lol though he's very pretty to look at so... all in all, a great package, ne? hehe just a suggestion, but your author's note said you were hoping to cure your writer's block so... well I was thinking Miyavi really would make a game of sex, sort of. A battle for dominance. Usually, I see Miyavi written as a bottom. Might be interesting to see him as a top, or to see him challenge Hakuei a bit, be a rather playful, disobedient bottom. Meh I have a very vivid imagination lol anyway, bravo hun well done. I look forward to another chapter, or several :D

You write probably some of the best descriptions I have ever read. Keep up the good work! By the way, I sympathise with your grammer problems. I've read really good fics that I want to keep reading, but I can hardly understand some of them.

YEEP! I love Miyavi! Love the story! BRING ON THE HOT KINKY SEX! I BEG OF YOU!!!!!!!!!!! ^__^ ^_^_^_^_^_^__^

Oh...my god...That was so rude of me! >< I MEANT hot kinky sex when you like...I really do love stories with plot. I'm not just saying this. I always write with plot. ^^:: God I'm a terrible person! O_O

Nice. A lot better than what I can write. You have much better vocabulary than I. The only thing that bothered me was the lipstick part. Somehow it just didn't fit in. The rest was good. Hope you write more.

Yeah! Sounds sexy. Do continue!

One thing I love about good authors is that they don't have to write sex scenes in order to have interesting text. They create the setting, the situations, the mood and possibly even the characters, and they make them all fit in the same story creating an almost alternate universe where everything works.

Maybe that was a bit too unclear. The story has that certain ambience to it, like you told me it should, and you are succesful in bringing it to life. The hopelessness, and yet some kind of underlying wish for things to get better, if even for just the night. Your dialogue may be scarce in this, but less is more, and moreover, it doesn't necessarily even need it.

Frankly, I see nothing that is wrong. The text is beautiful, and you're definitely one of the better authors. I'm waiting for the next part...