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oh my...goshhh...i just came across this story ...and i cannot describe in words how great it was! Wentworth miller is the sexiest man alive everrr....i just love him in prison break...every single thing about him...those abs, his eyes...k im gonna stop...but i just wanna repeat that you re doing a great job with this cause its not too cliche...pleaseeee please continueee....you have to....at least for me...i promise my sad enthusiasm for your story makesup for every single other person...pleaseee continue with this story..or i shall inundate you with annoying reviews....haha

I love this! This story is fuckign amazing! Write more!

I love this! This story is fuckign amazing! Write more!

I have to say It was pretty good. And Wentworth Miller was just the perfect touch.

Ooooh you wicked, wicked girl!!! I like!
J xx

I hope you have more

wow! grrrrrrrrrrrrrrreat story! i love wentworth miller!

Well, the 2nd chapter is kind of choppy, but it was hot, so that doesn't matter.

I guess what I mean by choppy is just the way it looks on the screen, kind of run on, but it's still good, so keep it coming!

I'm definitely enjoying the basic plot of this story. Naturally bad girl bringing out the animal in W.Miller, the idea is good! There are just a few things I would watch out for though. I know that spelling, punctuation, and capitals may not seem that important, but they do effect the story the reader gets, so try your best to do full spellings, correct punctuation, and capitals on their names. Also watch your tense, and make sure that you stay in one tense, preferably past tense. Things can't be jumping from "he said" to "she wraps", they're two different tenses which makes the story confusing. I know the review may not seem that nice, but keep in mind I'm only trying to help you grow as a writer. You have a wonderful ideas and a good imagination, don't let those small things bring your story down!

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