rate_review Reviews

I like the story line. Your sex scene was good for your first try at writing one. There are some grammatical and punctuational errors in the story. There are also places where you switch between present and past tense. Your story would be better and easier to read if you fixed those errors sometime. I hope this review doesn't come off negatively. I really do enjoy the story and I can't wait until the next update. :) Thanks for the entertaining read!

pretty good for a first time...i like the story so far keep it up

Great story-line! The sex scene was fine for a first attempt. Well done :D