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for When Toshiya was Angry

by pia

person ...
schedule November 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow this fic's sense of grammar and past/present tense was so horrible I had to print it and edit all of it. It was like I was in 8th grade English all over again, having to edit my classmates' papers. Is English even your first language? Get someone to read your work over, you have good ideas and basic structure sense but your grammar fucked it up.
person Totchichan
schedule January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was so nice!!! ^o^ Good job, more onegai?!^o^ *big puppy eyes*
person Seisen
schedule January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god!! It was so adorable XDDD I LOVED it! XD *gigglefits* poor die XDD.. Oh oh!!! Please do write a kaoruxkyo too I loved your style and its my favourite pairing too XD *giggle* *claps* <3~