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for A kiss so fatal

by heavenleigh

person Anon
schedule February 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ooooh let ville run away! and er...say that was bammies evil twin or seomthgin. lol. sappy ending!
person JenaVeveValo
schedule February 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Woo hoo! Kick ass! Can't wait for more! Keep it up!!! love ya! Good Luck!!!
Jen
*P*L*H*V.S.*W*H*S*
person VanillaRaspberry
schedule February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
AAAAHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!That was way too short!!!Good job though.
This is getting interesting.I say let Bam catch him...lol
schedule February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well I really like this it has a lot of potential, however the section in which you described Ville' thinking he brought this on himself seemed a little rushed, and I think a little more detail into that section and this would be a wonderful piece of angst. Also I quite like the idea of Bam realising what he has done and being consumed with guilt. Feel free to drop me a line if you want any help with this I really do think it's brilliant.
person HildeB
schedule February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm a bit late catching up,but I'm curious to see what would happen if he caught him.I've not read a story like this before.
person Gwts
schedule February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Poor Willa!
person snoogins...yea i no
schedule February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg did i say u could just stop lmao
good work hun
person Gwts
schedule February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Forgot to add...hmmm thinks about what could happen...if Ville gets away the story will end faster,but if he doesn't....I think you get my point.I want more story.The longer the better,chapters not so short next time,okay:)
person VanillaRaspberry
schedule February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I thought the chapter turned out very well.I just wished it was longer...Waiting for more!