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September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
GOOD GOD!!!! this is my new favourite fic! it is unbelievably sexy, and hot and cute and wonderful all at the same time. good job!
~Lucifera Black
~Lucifera Black
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September 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was really good. Great Job!
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July 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You switched POV for a few sentances, (instead of she it turned to I) I think it was unintentional, but just to let you know! And, put spaces between paragraphs and dialoge, it makes it SO much easier to read.
Now that I'm done with some constructive critism, to croon.
I don't like m/f normally, but... Davey is just too cute to resist! You're wondefully descriptive, which is really nice to see in a story like
I don't like m/f normally, but... Davey is just too cute to resist! You're wondefully this.
Hmm...and the idea of writing Davey's perspective is slightly intruiging. I might do it, I'm not too sure. I'll let you know if I decide too.
Well done.
Now that I'm done with some constructive critism, to croon.
I don't like m/f normally, but... Davey is just too cute to resist! You're wondefully descriptive, which is really nice to see in a story like
I don't like m/f normally, but... Davey is just too cute to resist! You're wondefully this.
Hmm...and the idea of writing Davey's perspective is slightly intruiging. I might do it, I'm not too sure. I'll let you know if I decide too.
Well done.
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July 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Haha, uhm, exuse my stupid typing. I don't know how I managed to repeat a whole sentence.