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July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
poor billy! i get that his tears are necessary for benji to comfort him but... poor billy!
in the begining you seemed to narrate everything equally. you gave as much description to benji getting into his car as billy cutting himself (i think you should have put more attention into the things that were more important instead of putting everything on the same level of description). i don't know if you understand what i mean by that, but in the later chapters its not so noticeable so i'll drop it. you also use the word 'stratle' instead of 'straddle' alot.
other then that i loved the fic and the storyline kept me riveted until the end. update soon!
in the begining you seemed to narrate everything equally. you gave as much description to benji getting into his car as billy cutting himself (i think you should have put more attention into the things that were more important instead of putting everything on the same level of description). i don't know if you understand what i mean by that, but in the later chapters its not so noticeable so i'll drop it. you also use the word 'stratle' instead of 'straddle' alot.
other then that i loved the fic and the storyline kept me riveted until the end. update soon!
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December 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was awesome! I love benji, as a gay guy myself......that was hott! I can't wait for more!
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December 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i like it i hope benj and bill end together
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December 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WRITE MORE PLEASE YOUR STORY IS GOOD!!!!!!