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February 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Fast and to the point, while being artfully pointless.
The storyline seems interesting enough, especially giving it some future possibilities with Masters in possession of this secret. My only complaint is that the sex, I'm sorry to say, is rather disappointing. First off, the tackiness factor of the inch boasting is off the roof, and the general action is on the line of 'he did this, this, that and then pulled off the'-fast forward action, instead of much more catching and reasonable 'He was going to show Randy all his talent, why neither he or Edge would be able to turn him down. He was good at it and he damn well loved it, the feel of...'. While the action you have written has some intensity, the feelingless and sensationless in-and-out doesn't really spark the interest.
The storyline seems interesting enough, especially giving it some future possibilities with Masters in possession of this secret. My only complaint is that the sex, I'm sorry to say, is rather disappointing. First off, the tackiness factor of the inch boasting is off the roof, and the general action is on the line of 'he did this, this, that and then pulled off the'-fast forward action, instead of much more catching and reasonable 'He was going to show Randy all his talent, why neither he or Edge would be able to turn him down. He was good at it and he damn well loved it, the feel of...'. While the action you have written has some intensity, the feelingless and sensationless in-and-out doesn't really spark the interest.