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by enomi

schedule March 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow, love it!!


From Me x
person Star55
schedule August 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, Danny & Dougie are my McFly OTP!
This was a great first chapter! I can't wait to see more!!

My only thing to "pick at" is your tenses don't stay the same ie: "Doguie finds a shirt to wipe his mess" it should be found to keep the tenses the same.

But it was a great chapter!
If you don't get many hits on here, might I suggest posting to mcflyslash on livejournal? (If you're not a member already lol) Drop me an email if you want (starrobinson55@gmail.com) and I can give you the link.

I hope you write more! I love where this is heading. Danny and Dougie are complete love <3
person Star55
schedule August 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Heh, don't mind my own misspelling of Dougie's name either *facepalms*