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for The Vampire Queen

by addykins1989

schedule February 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This story is soooo awesome! I'm new to this site so it took me a while to figure out how to review but i've read all 7 chapters and it is sooooooo good! Please don't stop!
schedule January 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I love it so far! Please write more soon!
schedule August 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I truly adore this story and I hope very much that there are more chapters to come! It has a great plot and is very well written. Kudos!
schedule April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awww...Gerard is so cute. I like it!
person Tya
schedule November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really really love this story, and now I really want biscuits and gravy, but besides that great job. I would suggest finding a beta and adding just a bit more filler into the story. If you're a fast reader like me it tends to fly by really quickly. Try describing the room(s) and the setting as well as the people? It might help to set the mood with weather or lighting, it would really be need to get a feel for this underground world of theirs. Is it all stone and earth? or is it a castle underground? That sort of thing. Just some suggestions, you don't have to listen to them but from one sister to another^^ *hugs* love ya and talk to you later!