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Yup, this is awesome. But then again, anything you write is which I appreciate as a reader. :D Wouldn't mind a follow-up to this story, even if it doesn't involve Matt...

who was watching matt, though?
is there more to this, even if only a second part?!

Great work! Amazing detail, all focused on a Tootsie pop. Shall never look at those or *blow* pops in quite the same manner ever again. Thanks for sharing! PW

Oh nummy... I sorta wanna know who was watching... Maybe the ghost from your other piece? That would explain Matt not realizing he was there...

That's a pretty sweet little bit of voyeurism and a very descriptive expansion on the old "I wish I was that lollipop" line. Since it involved two men (one unnamed, and I don't know the band) there were a few awkward places where it took a few moments to figure out you were describing the mystery watcher instead of Matt... but to your defense you are trying to keep him a mystery without giving any hints. Here your options were limited to "On the couch" and "his watcher" and stuff like that. (I write lesbian two-, three- and moresomes, which can get tricky, but at least I can use more descriptors of physical differences or even personality traits.)

Even as a standalone piece it gets the mood and even the feeling of the lollipop itself just right. The "gravel road" line was a great simile for its fate.

That was naughty, and not knowing who was watching Matt (could've been Johnny, Jimmy, Syn or Zacky. Who knows, and who cares?) made it even better. I won't look at lollipops the same way again.
Great work, as always :)