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for Yokan

by yukithevampireprince

person Gx-reborn
schedule June 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What an amazing story! I love the writing style you used for it. Very cool.
Oh thank you for commenting on my story!
person Lord
schedule June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
First of all, I love having Fu~ki here on AFF..there are just not enaugh BLODD-FFs on here..and MUCC..and Miyavi..
Hm..but there are so many grammar mistakes it is hard to read sometimes, and maybe you could leave space between the dialogs and the plot..or something..
It is really hard to read to me.
So practise a bit, will you?
..^-^..your treasure of words is really good I think, it is just your grammar..

Lord
person Kaichan
schedule June 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's a good story basis. There are some grammatical errors and such, but other than that it was pretty good. :> Maybe just proofread your works to make sure the sentence structure flows and makes sense?
person yami990
schedule June 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
more please.
person DanSan
schedule June 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dude... o_O... I like your writing!
Honestly, it's powerful!
Are you going to continue this?! Please, continue!!!
This is really, really GREAT... yeah, with capitals and all ^__^.
Keep!
person kami
schedule June 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ah! this was one to really have around! i liked the format of the writing very much.! keep writitng, maybe you could actually make novels someday ^.^
-kami