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for Kiss Me, Kill Me

by teacups

schedule July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
where did you go? i thought u died! please put more up! are you gunna continue soundtrack to a headrush? it's still awesome by the way. please don't disappear again; this was too good to go unfinished.
schedule July 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
YESSS!! Already I am liking it! (I just read chapter... one? :D) I can already see what you added, and I think it is definitely needed, seeing as it just forms the character more. Love it.

:D
schedule July 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The description is king. You really fleshed it out. It's amazing. I hope there is more chapters involved this time. . . A little more naughty parts would be ace.
schedule July 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well, I'm kind of borderline on rewriting. I mean... up until the part of Ryan/Lanie, it was awesome. The pacing was good, everything. I loved how you portrayed the characters, the dialogue, and the relationship with Frank. I would have liked it a bit more between the time Lanie slept with Ryan, but... :D I liked how it was like an outsider's POV through her head. It's hard to describe, but hopefully you get the gist of what I mean.

Now, on the other side, it would be really cool to see what you could do differently. Every writer can improve, even Stephen King. I'm not going to go into a huge long monologue about SK, but if you see areas of possible improvement, by all means, do it!

I love the story. When I read it the first time, I didn't review but I figured better late than never.

<3

Sally//Skel
schedule July 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm not sure a re-write is absolutely necessary. I really liked your characters, the dialouge, and the story in general, your description is great, but I really didn't like Lanie hooking up with Ryan after the entire Mel incident thing. . . it didn't sit well with me, but that's not my perogative, your story was just fine and had a Thelma and Louise kick to it at the end. I enjoyed the story, but it was short and kind of fell through your fingers because of the casms in the chapters; I think if you wanted you could fill it in more, but it's not totally necessary because your story is very, very good.
schedule July 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I really loved this.

I read some of the sequel too.

It's Great !

: )
person Mordeo
schedule March 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
My God... this is beautiful, and it's actually really, extremely creepy how much this paralells my life. Had I read this two years ago, I'd be having a heart attack right now. Sequel? Yes please. I need to know what happens to everyone.
schedule March 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Fucking amazing! I'm so glad you stuck with this and finished it. I really enjoyed it! I'll be sure to keep an eye out for a sequel.
person Eliza650
schedule March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, you are so talented. I've followed this since the beginning, and I love it all the way through. The way you write your OC is awesome. She's not two-dimensional at all, in fact I almost feel like I know her or something.

The ending here was great, with Lainee taking off and changing her name and everything. If you wrote a sequel, I think it would kick serious ass. I'll keep my fingers crossed for it!
person kinky vee
schedule March 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG that story was fucking awsome :) :) plz update :) gah ill soo give u a cookie if u do :)